Monday, January 31, 2011

Spring is Here -- poem

Here are two versions of a poem I wrote. Please let me know what you think:

The shadow does a tap dance
Over the fluttering fairy flowers
With its bride, the glittering sun.

The shadow flits
over the fluttering flowers
with its bride the sun

Thanks,
Kayla
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5 comments:

  1. EleanorFebruary 1, 2011 at 1:48 PM

    I love your poem! Great descriptive words!!!!

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  2. EleanorFebruary 1, 2011 at 1:52 PM

    Becca says: I like the the top poem best. I like the fluttering fairy flowers and the glittering sun. I really like it and I'm glad you made it.

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  3. UnknownFebruary 3, 2011 at 2:32 PM

    I like the first poem best...you have done a great job with description and alliteration (repeating the F F F sound in fluttering fairy flowers).

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  4. AnnaFebruary 7, 2011 at 2:38 PM

    I like the first version better. The words are more descriptive.

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  5. AlisonFebruary 7, 2011 at 4:42 PM

    I like the 1st one too. I signed up for your blog so we won't miss what you write. Alison

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